by Everlasting
Wishes... thanks for sharing. I like the simile used in the poem. |
by Ben Pickard
Concise and heartbreaking. I sense genuine feeling in this piece. |
I liked how you made the distinction of "our" memories instead of just saying "memories" in general. I felt like you could add a few more lines or perhaps punctuation to further show emphasis. "ghost in the night" wasn't too creative but it did prove a point. The use of "tremble" was strong as it's such a simple word but conveys so much as the same time. Maybe a specific detail about this person or a particular image would add to this piece, to give a little more depth and insight as to missing this person? |