I liked the jaunty tone of this poem and the rhyming. The initial idea of being surrounded by zombies in the darkest lobby instantly brought to mind the old style cinema lobby (like the one used in the Gremlins movie with the old style ticket booth at the door and the huge glass cabinet full of popcorn) Especially with the title of Zombie. However ... |
Thank you, and if you were wondering zombies are actually people (they have no brain so it's like a metaphor), and what I wanted to say with " Everything gets corrected / nothing is respected " no one is appreciated or respected and everyone is correcting others. For example people who are different they get "cut to size" or corrected. |