I appreciate the feeling of this poem, something you lost, potentiall religion or some other meaning make system in your life. The imagery you used was evocative. It definitely asked for multiple reads. I am a bit tripped up I think by the puncuation - it makes me not quiet follow where the breaks are, and what sentence relates to the other. That could be completely intentional, it just made the reading a bit confusing to me. |
Beautiful written. Add to my favorite. All the very best |
by Ben Pickard
Well written throughout. |