Waterlogged

by Obscure   Dec 7, 2019


I'm lost in my umbrella
But my jacket's nearly soaked
The things I used to keep me safe
Are hurting me the most
Umbrellas are not helpful
When you're underneath the sea
And now I think that all I've done
was far too much for me
Overwhelmed by seasalt
And stung by blue-green waves
My clothes are just as heavy
As the rules that felt so safe
I struggle while I'm sinking
With the things that I should say
But everytime I open up
The words all float away

- Obscure
© 2019

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  • 5 years ago

    by prasanna

    I really like this poem, I've been trying to comment on it but I couldn't find the words. This painted a really vivid image in my head, and I tried my best to paint the image that was in my head, i'm not at all the best artist but this is my attempt: https://i.imgur.com/jdjbGNl.png

    I'm a bit sad this poem wasn't nominated however :(

    Adding this to my favourites!

    • 5 years ago

      by Obscure

      Thank you for commenting and sharing your art! I'm glad you liked the poem

  • 5 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Wowzers. The depth in this is striking. All too clearly, I can imagine and FEEL the weight of being soaked even when shielded, the hope to not sink yet have everything pull you down anyway. Powerful write.

    • 5 years ago

      by Obscure

      I'm glad you liked the poem and that you could feel the things I was trying to illustrate!

  • 5 years ago

    by Star

    What I felt after reading this is insecurity. I am not sure why, but this reminded me of myself when I was younger.
    So well written :)

    • 5 years ago

      by Obscure

      Thank you for commenting, I'm glad you liked it! Insecurity is a good word for what I was trying to get across.

  • 5 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Umbrellas are not helpful
    When you're underneath the sea

    ^^

    Love these lines. The rhyming throughout, in fact, is superb.

    • 5 years ago

      by Obscure

      Thank you for your encouragement Ben!

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