Comments : Birdsville Sanctuary

  • 4 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    This was a neat piece filled with imagery!

    My only suggestions would be to separate the line where you reply or use quotes for the dialogue, and also a line break once you start describing the birds.

    Also the last line "some say escapees from botanical gardens add a creepy aura at night" was such a unique line, separate that from the rest so it's on its own line, and doesn't read like a run-on?

    • 4 years ago

      by Vince Gullaci

      Thank you for the constructive comments Poet On
      The Piano.I have edited the poem and added a new
      word to explain what the Fruit Bats were escaping from,
      Vince.