"munch bones and gulp them down" made me physically shiver. I liked that you expressed it in such a raw, uncomfortable, chilling way. It made the devastation of the ending lines, and that betrayal of trust, so much more impactful and gut-wrenching. |
by nouriguess
Thank you, MarryAnne. I am not keen on "venom-dropping" either but wasn't sure what to write instead. |
by RedRose
I thought it was beautiful and i love the imagery as well as the feeling of helplessness yet being self aware of it just makes it more terrifying. |