Very nice wording.

The emotional ties between fear and hope glimmer here. The wording here is gripping and really pulls the reader out of their comfort zone (in a good way). Often times when you read a poem it is filled with metaphors but here you did great to showcase your real emotions and that heightened my interest in the poem and kept me reading.

Taking the poem from your point of view, the narrator is you the author themselves and it seems like you are in pain and i read this like a memory of some kind. It seems like a person left your life and you are struggling with coping with the loss of them.

I love the double point of view. You show yourself to be in pain but you show this person in a negative light and you did it well. Which to me adds to the message you were trying to provide. You wanted to show the hurt you went through. You never strayed from your meaning.