by Sunshine May 2, 2020
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
Something in your words stands out, |
by rachael
This really hit home for me this is beautifully written |
by prasanna
"Something in your words stands out, |
by Sunshine
I like your suggestion, sounds better. Thank you Mark, as usually, you hit the nail on the head. |
by Hellon
There is something about this poem that doesn't quite gel for me...it seems like you have put a lot of emotional sentences together and, perhaps that's you intention I'm not sure? Your words make you sound breathless and anxious to my ears, like you are worried that this person may look over your shoulder and read your words. |
by Sunshine
that is indeed true, and that is indeed intentional but at the same time inevitable <3 |