Comments : Low Pitch

  • 4 years ago

    by Star

    “ The clouds
    made no art to the sky today.”
    ^
    I love this line!!

    “ and she,
    shall miss you silently,
    tonight.”
    ^
    I am no expert, but in my opinion “tonight” had threw off the flow a little bit. Maybe moving it before she would sound better?

    Anyways, this is a beautiful poem the title wraps it up in a great way!!