That second stanza really is quite superb, Star; highly imaginative. The lines are really tight, too, each one between 6 and 8 syllables which gives the poem a structured aesthetic.

All the best as ever and well done on this.

I love the images so much. The line "the night had slipped into your soul" - I absolutely love it. And the title, small and heavy really sums it up. Enjoyed reading it!