by Everlasting Jun 26, 2020
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
You said her skin was the ocean |
by D.
This is beautiful...I mean you need to remove 'a' from the first line, and I think you could un-capitalise the line beginnings as there's no punctuation (so it's a little distracting). Other than that, I adore the simplicity of this, and whilst I'm not huge on repetition in small poems, it works here. One thing I was curious about what was who the narrator was. Incredibly soothing poem, Luce. :) |
by Everlasting
Thank you for the suggestions. I made the changes. |
by Gracy Judith
Beautiful! Loved it! |