Lord

by Everlasting   Jul 9, 2020


Help me be as transparent as clear water
like a river always in motion
never stopping
always moving

but above all

rain in me wisdom so I never dry up
when I’m needed most

    report violation
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  • 4 years ago

    by BOB GALLO

    I know, It is your poem, your decision. I just saw you elaborated ( perhaps unknowing ly) about the water cycle The current, the water, it was good to elaborate about evaporation too. In this way you would complete the cycle. But evidently you wanted to do another thing with the water and that is nice too.

  • 4 years ago

    by BOB GALLO

    The circle would be more complete if you mentioned: rain on me after I burned with your wisdom, or something like this.
    Nice try.

    • 4 years ago

      by Everlasting

      Hmm, well, let me think about it
      Let’s pretend I’m a river for a second. I kind of want that rain to be a part of me to be inside of me that’s why I said rain in me wisdom rather than rain on me wisdom ( I don’t just want to be showered on with wisdom). Hmm now that I think about it I guess I’m greedy.

      Then If I were to say “rain on me after I burned with your wisdom” I’ll be implying that His wisdom is some sort of fire but to me His wisdom is like pure water. I grew up with the belief that rain is pure and that it cleans you that’s what i think of wisdom. Also, what’s the point in asking for rain when I have burnt with his wisdom? Assuming his wisdom is fire, I’ll be asking for some relief for myself but I want wisdom not for myself.

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