Comments : The Brass Cage

  • 4 years ago

    by Brenda

    beautifully sad Miss Kitty...reminds me of a lot us on this planet, we forget to fly.

  • 4 years ago

    by Walter

    This is so sad Kitty...but so beautifully written! Well done

    • 4 years ago

      by Kitty Cat Lady

      That's very kind of you, thanks Walter :-) x
      =^.^=

  • 4 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Beautifully written well rhymed and such sad emotional imagery. Definitely one of my favourites of yours. Milly x

    • 4 years ago

      by Kitty Cat Lady

      Thanks so much Milly, I'm glad you enjoyed it :-) x
      =^.^=

  • 4 years ago

    by D.

    A bird that cannot fly is a very devastating image, and this poem captures that feeling well. My only small query is regarding the cage itself. Slightly nitpicking, but

    'The bars that once were gleaming gold
    Are rusted dim with age
    The tragic bird will never leave
    The cheap brass-gilded cage. '

    Since the cage was originally gleaming gold, then was it ever 'cheap' or 'brass'? The title and 'cheap' contradict the first line of the final stanza. Other than this, a very well written poem!

    • 4 years ago

      by Kitty Cat Lady

      Hi Daniel. Thanks so much for your in-depth comments. Regarding the final stanza, the idea was that the bird once regarded the cage as 'gleaming gold' but has since realized it was nothing more than cheap brass ... I think I could have made that clearer.
      I really appreciate your comments :-) x
      =^.^=