Comments : Soliloquy

  • 4 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Beautiful!!

  • 4 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    These verses were so uplifting! The simple image of shrugging her shoulders, and the uneasiness and weight she subsequently got rid of, is beautiful. We need more of that. Being able to release what ties us down. Being able to laugh freely, without any force.

    Those last four lines made this poem even more endearing, almost intimate, especially since you brought in your perspective and the almost reverence at her newfound happiness (or progress toward). The joylessness you will feel when she cannot laugh, or is faced with even more painful burdens.

    Lovely, Aegis.

    • 4 years ago

      by Aegis

      Thank you for your kind words ?? Writing things that stem from happiness and elation usually isn't my strong suit. I've been working on this for months now to not have some sad or bitter ending. I'm happy with the result:)

  • 4 years ago

    by Skyfire

    Officially, you have a gift. Haha! Your words are just beautiful.