It might be a short poem but it certainly does the job. Great imagery and rhyming with valid message. Milly x

Interesting poem! This felt urgent, a restlessness in wanting to better the world even when others don't see the need for it. Then, you call for "slow and steady", and the use of "paradise" made me think of those in power or those who are living in luxury, completely ignorant, or purposely refusing to see the struggle of the people. Definitely had a dystopian feel to me, or at least breaking the mold of those who think everything is fine in this world. Also, could this be a commentary on climate change? The inability to breathe as well as in the past, questioning what the future will be like, demanding change. Also, knowing that you can't always travel the least resistant path. You'll always be met with someone pushing back.

This is wonderfully written, I read this over a few times from different perspectives, an extremely versatile poem