The story for a broken heart

by cece   Jul 13, 2004


Hey
I'm lying on the ground stand up and take a look around and see that u and me will never be and so i take a walk down by a stream and wonder why i always gotta dream.thought life was supposed to be real but now its like all that is is only how i feel. i need you here and now oh wow my bad for loving you loving a fool just seemed like the right thing to do

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  • 19 years ago

    by BaybeBlew

    Yo I wasn't trying to offend you, keep your cool, holy crap. I'm not saying it was like horrible or anything, you don't have to be a bit.ch about it. You obviously don't take critism very well. You want all your comments saying what an awesome job you did? Come on, thats not going to help you at all, atleast if i gave you a shytty rating I told you why. Get a grip and grow up.

    -Blue

  • 20 years ago

    by BaybeBlew

    Hey
    That was an alright poem, it needs some work though, it seems kinda like your trying to hard to rhyme it. Try breaking it up into lines too, it's more pleasant to read that way. Just creative critisim, Not trying to offend you or anything. Keep writing.
    Love,

    -Blew ^_~

  • 20 years ago

    by nikki

    good work