good work

Hey
That was an alright poem, it needs some work though, it seems kinda like your trying to hard to rhyme it. Try breaking it up into lines too, it's more pleasant to read that way. Just creative critisim, Not trying to offend you or anything. Keep writing.
Love,

-Blew ^_~

Yo I wasn't trying to offend you, keep your cool, holy crap. I'm not saying it was like horrible or anything, you don't have to be a bit.ch about it. You obviously don't take critism very well. You want all your comments saying what an awesome job you did? Come on, thats not going to help you at all, atleast if i gave you a shytty rating I told you why. Get a grip and grow up.

-Blue