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  • 4 years ago

    by Michael

    This is a nice and short poem STAR. I really Don't feel anything needs adding. It tells me of a twilight moment, when the sun sets and the 'hustle' of the evening settles to a quietness:)
    * just sum, should read sun?*
    I like it.

    • 4 years ago

      by Star

      Oooops I read over that so many times and I didnt see it lol!!
      Thank you for reading, I like your interpretation :)

  • 4 years ago

    by prasanna

    Love this!!

    • 4 years ago

      by Star

      Thanks!!

  • 4 years ago

    by Everlasting

    I wish to write you a detail comment but I don’t think I can at the time. So, I’m just going to spit and post whatever comes from my first read.

    “ I saw the road behind me
    fold into the setting sun,
    and the clouds swallow
    her bleeding rays.”

    —- “her bleeding rays,” so that means the sun is a she. The clouds swallowed the rays. It sounds like the sun is a victim of abuse.

    “Star born fairies start
    pulling the moon to a sky
    that watches an uncertain
    world hustle then hush.”

    What do I see? I guess I see destruction. This star born fairies are pulling the moon to a sky. The moon is going to crash with the Earth. The humanity that once hustle now is hushed by the scenery. Such a tragedy. I wouldn’t add anything to it right now. May be just a title? But I’m sure the inspiration will come to you someday and you might end up editing this piece into something much more.

    • 4 years ago

      by Star

      I recently realized its fun to rewrite and edit my poems , maybe one day i will^_^ thank you!