I mean I really like the shape of the poem. but I struggle with where your going with any deep meaning... the last two layers of the poem scream run on sentence, but I know it's an abstract poem and rules don't apply... so I go back to trying to find some deeper meaning. Then wonder what your trying to inspire in my mind. Sry... don't mean to be harsh...

you know what would her really cool if I could read the poem backwards and it had a cohesive logic and meaning!!! Ehh... that that would be killer abstract!

I don't know how this could be a run-on sentence I was having trouble coming up with the words. I'd writer's block, please don't judge me wrong it was my first time trying a Joseph's Star Form.