It's so nice to read a rhymed poem that flows this well.
The idea of slipping off mortality like a coat, then traveling to an external heaven is alluring. If you don't mind though, I'll save that dream for a later date.

A good write.

Take care.

I can only echo what Michael says, certainly in regards to the rhyming flow. But then, I would say that!

All the very best.

Wow! Really like this a lot. It flows beautifully, just like water over pebbles..in a lush stream.

Beautiful and smooth. The similie of a coat for life is perfect... great poem!

This has depth, its really beautiful, congrats Obscure ^_^

Beautifully written. I love the idea of mortality as a coat we just slip off to travel to the next plane. Congrats on a very well deserved win.

I liked this then and I like it now. Well done.

Thank you all so much for commenting!