I really liked the beginning, especially your vase metaphor. I was hoping for an ending to tie into the introduction.

Perhaps...

but you always
manage to clamber out,
over the fragments

as the shadow
in my closet.

Anyway, just a thought. I do love your work, so it's just a suggestion..

I like Michael's suggestion too and, like him, really enjoyed the vase metaphore. Very imaginitaive.

Yes, such a unique perspective using a vase! "You made me see the world from shattered angles" - this really spoke to how much of an impact someone can have on our view of the world, for better or unfortunate worse.

Wow, another great read, I see that a lot of people have commented on the vase line, but for me the line about leaves having no veins was a great imagery that I haven’t thought of before!

This piece really made me think of all of our insecurities and shadows of ourselves, and how we try to keep parts of our past hidden or versions of us hidden but every so often we can stumble and realise how fragile a part of us can be, and how another part of ourselves can be that influence to break us.

It reminds me of the saying that we are our own worst enemies ...

Great piece