I really love the last two paragraphs. There's so much pain in this poem and it's so moving.
' Lonely tear-drop' really resonated with me. It's an excellent turn of phrase that has so much power and emotion in it. Also the idea of sinking in the devil's blood is chilling, but brilliant.
I like the couple of subtle rhymes throughout this. It was a good idea not to rhyme the whole poem, I think, because the way it is seems more emotional and angry.
All in all, I thoroughly enjoyed this.