by Sunshine Jan 6, 2021
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
Your face burns, in stillness, |
by Rayven
There is a ton to like about this poem. I'll get the technical stuff out of the way first. I love how the punctuation is placed, it gives each line room to breath and it makes sense because this is such an emotional poem. I wouldn't personally change anything in that sense. |
by Mr. Darcy
As Ben said, so much imagery here. The emotional contrast of inner heat/anger presented on a calm/reserved/cold exterior came to mind. There are some people that have these inner cores that they hide, for fear of showing themselves in a less favourable light. There are perceptive people, usually someone close, someone open of heart, who can see through this mask, see the truth that lies within. But there's a cost, isn't there? |
by Sunshine
Thank you Mr Darcy! Appreciate your thorough reading <3 |
by Ben Pickard
Overflowing with imagery. Excellent stuff, Rania. |
by Sunshine
Thank you Ben <3 |