Watch (9 syllables )
by Everlasting Mar 18, 2021
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crowds of crows |
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3 years ago
by Mr. Darcy
Crowds of crows
cover the sky
night falls
And suddenly the sun
was stolen
fireflies
in crow’s wings
become like stars
a murder
steals away
the darkness
Batman asks,
have some one seen
my bats?
Yes, their wingbeats smudged
that distant dawn -
3 years ago
by Mr. Darcy
And suddenly the sun
was stolen-
3 years ago
by Everlasting
Nine syllables! But to the point
So the poem follows:
Crowds of crows
cover the sky
night falls
And suddenly the sun
was stolen
My turn:
Fireflies
in crow’s wings
become like stars -
3 years ago
by Star
Im jealous I will add to it too :p
A murder
steals away
the darkness. -
3 years ago
by Everlasting
So it goes:
Crowds of crows
cover the sky
night falls
And suddenly the sun
was stolen
fireflies
in crow’s wings
become like stars
a murder
steals away
the darkness
Batman asks,
have some one seen
my bats?
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3 years agoby Keira Pickard
The title complements the poem really well, as it could be taken as " watch the crows" or " watch the night fall". Whichever the reader interprets :)
I like the alliteration that you've used it most of the lines and also how much you've displayed in nine syllables. The imagery is excellent and I can see it all clearly.
It must be very hard to express yourself in so little wording, but I though you did this really well. I loved it!-
3 years ago
by Everlasting
Thank you Keira. As always love your comments.
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3 years ago
by Star
Love this!!! 9 syllables yet you painted a clear picture :)
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3 years ago
by Everlasting
Thank you!
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