Comments : Drought

  • 3 years ago

    by Keira Pickard

    It's a coincedence, as I love double haikus/senryus/syntuits but don't see them often. I've read two of them in the past day!
    Anyway, l really liked this one. I've always thought that putting everything you need to say into so little is really difficult, but this seems effortless. Enjoyable, if a little dark.

  • 3 years ago

    by Em

    Astounding work Hellon,
    Nominated.

  • 3 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Drought, unless yours blowfly.
    Congratulations!

  • 3 years ago

    by Keira Pickard

    Congratulations!

  • 3 years ago

    by Star

    Droughts are really sad, people still do suffer because of them.
    Congratulations!!

  • 3 years ago

    by Em

    I'm overjoyed to share the front page with you Hellon. Definitely a worthy win, Congratulaions x

  • 3 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    I rather liked this. Particularly "no fish for dinner".

  • 3 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "desiccated" is such a concrete and bleak adjective; I don't see it too often and it hit hard here as the first word. I felt the hopelessness in this, the despair, the inability to do much but anticipate death. Powerful, Hellon.

  • 3 years ago

    by Jack

    Nice and short poem!

  • 3 years ago

    by Everlasting

    Congratulations on the win

  • 3 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    I've always liked the word, 'dedicated', I think this came from mum's jam sponge with sprinkled dedicated coconut. Yum! As for these haiku's the imagery is powerful as is the suffering. I presume that the dried river is due to man disturbing the flow and to hell with the consequences!