Comments : I long for you

  • 3 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Exceptional work. It's a shame I'm out of votes. I hope someone nominates.

  • 3 years ago

    by Keira Pickard

    Wonderful. The rhyme scheme was difficult to work out, but I eventually decided that it was:
    AABBA AABC AABBAC.
    It must have been extremely hard to write. I loved the repetition of rhyme throughout the poem and the thought of coming up with different words that all rhyme over and over.
    I loved the imagery in the opening lines.

    I long for you to be with me
    like dew on grass at morning free
    with sunshine rays above the hill

    ^^ the similie in this was really stunning to read, calming , with a beautiful picture. The idea of dew clinging to the grass in the way you cling to whoever you're describing in the poem was brilliant.
    All of it was truly lovely. I really loved this :)

  • 3 years ago

    by prasanna

    Beautiful. Congrats on the win!

  • 3 years ago

    by Keira Pickard

    I'm glad this won! Congratulations :)

  • 3 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    I long for you to win this week
    for poetry to sing yippee
    You did and I for one was pleased
    A form like this you wrote with ease
    Your win made me, today, happy!

    • 3 years ago

      by Everlasting

      I took the liberty of re-writing the above cheer! I hope you do not mind me. Just trying to fixed some of the hiccups to make it sound smoother. But I’m displeased with my “fixed” as I feel I made it lose its emotion.

      I longed for you to win this week
      for poetry to sing yippee
      You wrote a form like this with ease
      now both of us are truly pleased
      your win today has made me happy!

      Thank you!

  • 3 years ago

    by Em

    Absolutely love this and glad it won the front page, how lovely and relatable.....'I long for thee '