Comments : Natural Talent - Haiku

  • 3 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    In contrast nature
    Vs human sounds are
    Chalk and cheese

    • 3 years ago

      by Walter

      Thank you Mr Darcy and I couldn't agree more!

  • 3 years ago

    by Em

    Hi Walter,
    The title 'natural talent' could really be about anything couldn't it as we all have these hidden talents but I know with this type of poem the title is used as an hidden fourth line and needs to be done well which you've executes it well here, as ever.
    The piece is done well and I have to say nature vs man made sounds are often much more calming... I'm having some trouble with noisy neighbours at present who think it's OK to party until gone 2/3am and it's taking its toll that being said, I'd gladly wake up at 4/5am to listen to the tweeting birds.
    Take care,
    Em x

    • 3 years ago

      by Walter

      Thanks again Em for leaving your lovely comment. I'm sorry about your noise pollution problem at the moment and hope it gets better for you soon, so all you'll hear are tweeting birds x

  • 3 years ago

    by Anonymous

    Wow this is a striking Haiku!

    It's simple and profound, a beautiful work.

    What a relevant time for me to come across this work as I'm going on a 5 day camping trip tomorrow. I need a nice escape from the city where the noise never stops.

    I don't know if you did it on purpose or not, but I think on line 2 you could replace the word "seems" with its plural form "seem."

    As in "sounds... seem so peaceful" instead of "sounds ... seems so peaceful"

    Great job!

    • 3 years ago

      by Walter

      Thanks so much Anonymous! I didn't even know I did that until you pointed it out and of course, you are absolutely right and I have since corrected it. Lucky you, I hope you enjoy your camping trip tomorrow and have a great escape for your 5 days glorious relaxing getaway. All the best!

  • 3 years ago

    by carol wiseman

    Hi Walter, yes I agree. to much to fast and that includes talking. Nature verses paracetamol. Umm nature? Big like.

    • 3 years ago

      by Walter

      Thank you Carol and I totally agree...Natural remedies will always win :)