by c. a. williams Jul 28, 2021
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
white sheets pick at her and |
It's great to see a new poem from you on here! You have such a refreshing, unique style and your language in this is harrowing, haunting. When I read this, I saw these abstract, distorted feelings taking shape, or rather, a lack of shape here. The discomfort of body and mind. Your word choice in this made the piece even darker, giving it a hopeless tint, like the body is becoming lifeless, everything inside spilling on the floor. I don't know how or why I can picture it so clearly, like the exhaustion of her body and living and struggling and every part of her giving up. This is such a profound image of grief too, of sinking, of not being in control of her movements, of not being able to feign interest and the everyday actions, every ounce of her, what remains, collecting on the floor. |
Thank you for your kind words. |