Final Race

by Aken Sol   Jul 14, 2004


It’s 12 o’ clock on a Tuesday night
“Time for me to race” he yells, “Alright!”
He drives up to his usual hang out
Stops in front of his line, ready for his bout.

He gets ready with his hands on the wheel
And the pedals down from the weight of his heel
The engines roar and the cement’s on fire
The racers zoom off with a screech of the tire

Drifting right and left, he shows off his skills
All the money he wins help pay his bills
Using a great car with talent to match
With Speed that makes him impossible to catch

He’s at top speed and the lights flashes by
The rush he feels is enough to justify
Why he tries to run from his average life
The sting of “normal” is worse than any knife

Racing seems to loosen the world’s grip
But than the brakes began to rip
He went off the rail and crashed into the Rocks
He laid in his car dead as time tick tocks

The paramedics came seconds too late
His death was just another work of fate
Soon enough people will forget his face
And how it all ended on his final race

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  • 20 years ago

    by DMG

    thats really great

  • 20 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    Things in caps are what I think should be added in/corrected.
    "And the pedals ARE down from the weight of his heel"
    "The racers zoom off with a screech of A tire "
    "All the money he wins HELPS TO pay his bills"
    "He’s at top speed and the LIGHT flashes/ lights FLASH by"
    "But THEN the brakes began to rip"

    Heh, I liked it Aken. Almost autobiographical. BTW have a good time in nam.

  • 20 years ago

    by DMG

    Cracky! I gotta give it up to u on this one man. Nice rhyming, good concept, great finish. It's original and very well written. Great job man.
    -David
    p.s. what you know me?!

  • 20 years ago

    by BaybeBlew

    Interesting poem, a very different topic to write on. I liked it, the flow was pretty steady, but the rhyming seemed forced at first. But over all it was good. Keep writing.
    Love,

    Blue

  • 20 years ago

    by More

    wonderful poem.. reminded me of my friend.. i never knew if he race because of money or because of the things he was going through.. i wish i have ask him.... never got the chance... anyways, thanks for sharing..

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