by Star Sep 15, 2021
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
you collected shells |
This was so intriguing to read! I liked the theme of calluses, and what they represent in dealing with pressure and pain, and the symbolism of shells being collected in this person's heart. I've never heard a verse worded like that, it's unique. It felt like a more poetic way of implying this person put a barriers around their heart, to protect them, to form a shield, to create this fortress to try and keep out any additional hurt. The way you wrote "not the beautiful kind" on a separate line filled me with an ache. The contrast of someone collecting sea shells as a hobby, as something that lifts their spirits, as a reminder of nature's beauty... versus someone collecting shells and building that barrier out of necessity, because they don't want others trying to find their way in and reach out to them, to see or acknowledge their suffering. |
by Star
You did not read that stanza wrong I wrote it wrong :) I thought I wrote the way you did! |