by Love Nov 21, 2021
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
My heart has become a castle |
by Sunshine
Very sad and enchanting. There is some tingy feeling of longing and helplessness in those lines that touch deep down. Well done. |
First line, "as" should be "has" I believe? I liked how you mention that it isn't just the ghost of your memory, or a shadow of what used to be. Everything you witnessed and heard and saw is present, won't leave you and is harder to even let go. Powerful emotions here. |
by Love
Thank you for catching that! And thank you for your input. (Hugs) |