NaPoWriMo Day 4

I know this poem is for you, although I feel very lost at what the meaning was meant to be. There were good parts in there, but overall it lacked something to make it real.(of course this is your personal thought process letting it self free though. These are not criticisms, just hard to relate). Read and thought about, thank you.

I do not know why you started the poem with present continues tens. The motion of falling had no baring on the events that fallowed. Actually the poem, entirely happens as the result of the falling not the falling itself.
Of course you could say in first you draw the picture of a rain falling then ... but we both know this is not the case. Because the sentences would totally be different way, considering the skill of your poetical drawing.
A poet must pay attention to all these details. If you want to venture to unknown you have to protect yourself from .... and nonsense.

By the way the poem is so cute and delightful. Sometimes you are too playful with the images. But I love that.

This instantly reminded me of a conversation years ago where I was reminded that I have to take care of myself first, before being able to tend to and nurture others. Because if I give everything to everyone else, I will eventually be empty and not have enough for myself or others. Really liked the meaning of this, and the expansive meaning of what rain can mean: nutrients, self-love, gentleness, a quenching of what someone has been without for so long. One thing though. In the last line in the second stanza, should that read "i was given" or "i'd been given"?