Small Pains

by Satish Verma   Mar 6, 2023


I want you to call
me, when my shirt was stainless
and sun was rising.

The monarch lands on
my book to read the verse?
meant for the moon.

The empty mind spins.
Script was totally burnt-out in
my voicelessness.

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  • 1 year ago

    by ddavidd

    Mr Satish Verma with all do respect, the misplaced question mark there is so unsettling:
    "The monarch lands on
    my book to read the verse?
    meant for the moon."
    It doesn't belong, for it is absolutely meaningless to put a question mark in the middle of the sentence, where the sentence is not even finished!!
    So it must be a mistake. In the past few years, few times, I mentioned these ocasions to you via comments for you have sometimes these missplaced question-marks. But you never corrected them. So, it shows that you only throwing the poems there, never coming back to them. But as an audience (a good one) I need to know how many more unwanted mistakes you leave there on your poems without never bothering to change. This, by itself worries me because your works are already very abstract and sophisticated, so, it is impossible for a reader to see all those propeble mistakes clearly, like the question marks. This is distancing you from the reader, for readers must somehow matter, otherwise why do we even bother to post??
    Don't get me wrong I love your silence and respect it, but nothing in extreme could be healthy. The universe is proportioned. This is a philosophical fact my friend.
    Anyway I am a fan. A fan about to resign.