I sank with the sun

by Ben Pickard   Jul 26, 2023



I waited for you
where the sun meets the sea

and
sinks

to the other side

the water boiled
and evaporated,
leaving only
salt and screams -

I waited for you

but
you
never
came

--

Ben Pickard 2023

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  • 1 year ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I, too, can't get over the part of "leaving only salt and screams - ". And it's so wild that I saw Star's comment yesterday and am currently listening to Hozier on a playlist right now! Can't get over this poem. The title alone is so powerful and sorrowful in its meaning.

    • 1 year ago

      by Eros

      Past the interesting imagery of the title and the strong verses, there's still the choosing of each word to talk about - the poem's overall short but shows as much as a thousand words could. Rich and thoughtful work, Ben.

  • 1 year ago

    by Star

    “the water boiled
    and evaporated,
    leaving only
    salt and screams -“

    This part is soooo good, I want to steal it. It makes feel like it’s a part of really great lyrics. It reminds me of Hozier’s if you know him.
    Awesome poem!!

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