It is impressively tasteful and passionate. It was tastefully sensual and erotic but all the passions were alight with love, otherwise without passion and love, sexuality seems utterly boring.
You almost lost me in the beginning, I was about to get a little bored then you suddenly strike gold. You exposed how stretchable you imagination is aligned with your poetical muscles. Then, I was so impressed with the piece that even a mundane ending couldn't change my mind how original the piece is.
But really: "do you even realize my entire being was captured by you" ??
You already covered that tenfold more poetically, you didn’t need to bring the audience back to the ground and end the piece with something less strong using slogen. Maybe you are not convinced how good you are.
Yet it is only my opinion, I could be wrong.
Very refreshing!!