Comments : Tiny Fingers - Senryu

  • 6 months ago

    by Kiko

    This is a strong senryu. If you were to dispense with the out-of-date 5-7-5 formula, it could be made a little stronger:

    Tiny fingers
    that barely hold a bottle
    have seized my heart

    • 6 months ago

      by Gem

      I had no idea the formula had changed haha. When did that happen and what's the new one? :D

    • 6 months ago

      by Kiko

      There are entire books on how to write haiku and senryu. It is a wonderful art form. Counting syllables 5-7-5 is an oversimplification that has gradually diminished over time.