Hi,
This is such a great poem. I had to read twice. I was a bit confused at first, but I love how the title is well reflected in the poem. The only thing I can really critique is the absence of capitalization. I used to write poems like this and for me it took away from my poems. Your poem however is not missing anything, it truly paints a vivid picture, and the use of metaphors are well placed which allow for visualization.
I'll keep reading your work. =)