I love this poem. The rhyming the wording.. all of it.. I love it. Great job really.

I really liked this one. You have a nice vocabulary and the words flowed very nicely. Great job! Keep it up!

excellent imagery, and the perfect words are used to convey the images! well done! Julie -xx-

Very very good. You're a very passionate writer, I'm really starting to like your work! Good description, structure and use of words. I'm adding you to my favorites :)

-Marta.

Pretty good. Some of the lines should have been longer in order to fit in better with the rhythm, and some of the rhyme sets were used twice in the poem. That isn't necessarily a bad thing, I just wanted to point out you used words that rhymed with "in" twice. Actually, I've decided that REALLY doesn't matter, so ignore what I just said. Good poem.

i lyke this one alot.