aww i love it. nice job really.

i love it...simple short and sweet....no faboulous

Very short and sweet. It was a pretty good pem.

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Wow! That was touching!!! I really liked it!!

That was soooo good. Very deep and strong. I loved it. You're such a good writer and keep at it cause you've got huge talent! Oh! and thanks for your lovely comments, much appreciated. Keep postin, I'd like to see some more. :)

excellent, lots of raw emotion, well done!

Argh, once again a very sad poem. The AA BB rhyme worked pretty well, considering it can become dangerously cheesy sounding when used incorrectly. I guess you used a bit of poetic license by changing the rhyme scheme for the last stanza, and that is totally fine. Good poem.

beautiful. it really touched me, i think because i can relate so well to it. there have been so many times that i wanted to just trade places with someone so they didnt have to go. you did such a great job with this one!

so beautiful

the flow of this works so well, good job!