Sweet poem. With out telling it how will she ever know? Try to tell it. IF you want more time..take it.. But don't delay too much, you may miss her for ever. BEst of luck!!!!! :D

I understand what you're talkin about here, so I definitely connected. AS for some advice as to how you could improve this poem... here I go:

1. try to make the # of syllables per line more standard so the rhythm flows better
2. fade and mad don't really rhyme very well
3. friend and banned is okay, but a little off
4. yeah I think you should move this poem to the sad or love section, not the slang

:) Thanks alot guys, I really appriciate the comments. Thanks for the advise Sean, I'll work on my rhymes a bit more :D and yeah, there is a bug submitting poems to the love section... I'll change it to the correct place once we can edit our poems :) THNX again :)

awesome!

Awesome poem. From the heart and written beautifully. I agree with the others, tell her!! lol, and just like mystic thoughts said... you won't always be asking yourself what if. Good job and keep it up.
(Oh! and thanks for you comment, much appreciated.) :D

This is spiffy... i like the twist of fate stanza...that was a good one

You said in your profile that you're not very good at writing poems. I think you're wrong, you have a great talent and it's wonderful that you can share it with us. Please keep them coming.

Vanessa

Thats a really beautiful poem Allen, the girl you wrote it for would be very very touched im sure. Thanks for having a read at my poem also.

take care x

good poem i understand exactly what you are going through.... keep it up! and good luck!
MiCheLLe

this poems beautiful :) your such a good writer..dont stop writing please <333
-Mortalidaga

aww that was soo nice i dyunno how u can think u cant write it was so nice!

xxoo,
alysse

This was really, really good.

this poem i love a whole bunch!!!! i could read it over and over very good job i cant wait to hear more

omg u took my breathe away in this poem and i mean it i have the feelings for my friend and its been this way for 3 years i cant find awayto tell him and if i do will our friendship still be the same i have been there for him for 2 of his relationships and he always asked for my advice and i told him what i thought i would want and he never understood i just wish i could tell him

crap i just told you a story you probably did not want to here srry
anyways good not let me take that back fantastic poem please dont tell us that you cant write poetry cuz you can

Beautiful poem Aleen, touched me deeply keep up your amazing words and remeber one things poems really don't have to ryme

hehe awesome poem..I like it ^_^ Keep writting!
Shanney