Theres alot of emotion in this poem, so I can easily tell you've got that down. Some advice I have for you is to write the rest of your poem out instead of using 2 or u to shorten down words. Also it's ok to hover around the same topic, I do that alot, but I think you should expand your horizen, write about something you wouldn't normally write about, alot of times it helps you to be more creative. Other than that I think you're doing very well, just keep writing.