very nice poem, Liam...

I think you might want to do some rearranging though (when our ability to edit is returned) In stanza 2, you say that a tear rolls down your face and in stanza three, you are hoping it doesn't fall. ok, technically, I guess it could be a different tear, but you can easily flip those two stanzas... and in the first stanza you also say that a "tear runs from my eye" again, technically they could be different tears than the one that hasn't fallen yet...but you could change that line to say, "A tear wells up in my eye".... just something to think about...

Great writing!

great work, you're heaps talented, tops!

i loved it and i wouldnt change a thing i give it a 5

wow thats well good email me if ya want 01085@dixonsctc.org.uk

I Liked this poem, keep it up!