Hey Hun,
That was a really good poem-even if you don't think so!!! I really like that, I like how it's all chopped up like that and not the same the whole way through. And don't worry, everything will get better for you, because you know that you have me, you can call me anytime-even at 3 in the morning. I really love you, and am so lucky to have a friend like you!!! And please keep writing!!!!
Actas!! (always closer than a sis)
Sierra Rae

I liked it, but I think you can definitely improve it. The rhyming was okay but sporatic, which is fine. But I think you should work at creating a rhythm for this poem, because right now it is jumbled. I know you said that you are confused right now about the topic, and that is fine, but later, when you figure things out, I think you should consider editing this poem. Good work!

That was a great poem. Filled with pain. Sometimes we loose something, so that we can gain something more beautiful.MAy be something more nice is waiting for you. Cheer up. Hope things turns out better for you. If it's your first poem, you have ever written, then this is an amazing piece of work. I am waiting to read your next poem. Regards,
Trincy.

wow! amanda...that was really good....(this is merrily by the way) ...anyway...i hope things worked out..keep your head up and stay strong...

-merrily