by Raven Aug 13, 2004
category :
Friendship, family /
family
I am daring |
I liked this piece as soon as it started, but then the structure and flow got lost a little midway. But still, a good piece. I liked the subject matter and how you approached it. You also had a nice rhythm, with simple but efficient rhymes. |
by someoneimnot
So true. definetly the same boat. great poem.look forward to reading more. |