Now dat iz deep girl..Keep ya head up.

This poem is a really detailed insight into a world today. its such a shame is has to be so dreary, but thats the way we've chosen to make it. thanks for your vision, i hope it reaches people...
btw, thanks for your comment!

Emma

A rather enjoyable piece. The shortness of the lines makes it a speedy piece, and makes the flow all the sweeter.

You had good wording, which is always nice to see. I particularly liked

'Girls bound with rope
and silenced with tape'

Obviously, the lines before played their part in make it flow so well, but it was the similarities in these two lines that made it so poetic.

Well done. A piece I think you can look back on with pride.

Brad

P.S. Please comment and vote on every poem you read.

P.P.S. Thank you for your comments on my poem 'A Vampire's Curse'.

Wow absolutely amazing so sad powerful and true. i love it 4 sure 5/5 great job yr very talented

Heartfelt and very moving. Good piece - you should post more.