by Kaitlin Elizabeth Aug 17, 2004
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
The heavens open up |
by N J Thornton
Lovely work again. Brilliant. |
by Sean Allen
This was a good poem, and because I think you're a good writer, I'm going to do my best to give you any tips I can to improve. I think you should work on creating a clearer rhythm, because some lines are so much longer than others that it just seems odd when you read it out loud. I know that sometimes you just have a line that you really want to keep the way it is, so yeh, I understand where that is coming from. Just a suggestion, and keep up the good work. |
by Cantchangeme
Right how did that get such a low rating, in my view this poem is worth a lot more, and its getting a deserved 5 from me |