Right how did that get such a low rating, in my view this poem is worth a lot more, and its getting a deserved 5 from me

This was a good poem, and because I think you're a good writer, I'm going to do my best to give you any tips I can to improve. I think you should work on creating a clearer rhythm, because some lines are so much longer than others that it just seems odd when you read it out loud. I know that sometimes you just have a line that you really want to keep the way it is, so yeh, I understand where that is coming from. Just a suggestion, and keep up the good work.

Lovely work again. Brilliant.