Beautiful. If I were judging it in a contest, I would give it a perfect score, hands down. The whole story was just excellent and I'm inspired!

--Bryce

WOW.....That was awesome I was blown away. A perfect ending 5 out of 5

I love these kind of poems where they tell stories. Great job!

Hey this was really different i enjoyed it very much - i didnt have that great an understanding of the story tho so im off to check out the first III parts...
have a look at myw ork if you have a chance
Thanks Eirisa