by Brad Champagne Aug 20, 2004
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Life, society /
other
The darkness of the encircling gloom |
by Kevin
Yo nice one...in the third stanza...the line with zeal and vigour...it seems to me that those two words soound better then other way around...but then you'd have to find another word to wrap it up at the end......still...it grates the way you have it eh... |