M.U.T.E

by Kevin J   Aug 20, 2004


My best foot stepped forward
And you know what I got
An undeserving rude comment
Lame advice, that helped not

Unsure of my talents
Wanting feedback from you
Put my very best forward
And you did what you do

To make me feel worthless
Seemed to be your main goal
If it is, then you failed
For my pride is still whole

Each critique stung me slightly
Bet you thought it was cute
Now I put my best forward
And your opinions on Mute

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  • 20 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    this is great.. i love this poem.. your an amazing poet keep up the good work cause I love your stuff

  • 20 years ago

    by David

    The fourth line, first stanza needs to be change, it looks forced. (I should talk) hehe
    As for the rest of the poem, this is a masterpeice, and it should be the P&Q anthem.

    4th Stanza is incredibly clever. I love great endings.

  • 20 years ago

    by Eibutsina

    Yeah one poet to another i totally felt that - i know how it feels when people bag your sh!t...its like stomping ontop of your most inner thoughts, your heart and soul - dont worry unless they have something constructive to say FARK it!!! Keep ya head up for real i think your wonderful!! Xoxo Eirisa

  • 20 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    Haha, for some reason I really liked the "helped not", its like you screwed up that sentence (because people don't say that often) for the rhyme, but then again, its just so freakin fun to say that iono... I wish the last line had an "are" in it, but that would mess it up in its own way I think, so never mind, good stuff!

  • 20 years ago

    by Lone-doodler (C)

    Yes!! 'tis good!!!

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